The form is anaphora, the repetition of a word or group of words at the beginnings of the lines. In this poem, three stanzas with five repeating, two-word groupings.
I heard the screen door wrench free of its hook
I smelled the decay of leaves ripped from the trees
I felt the cloying heat swell and cling, then plunge
I tasted the bile rising hot in my throat
I saw the umbrella dive over the rail
I knew it was going to be bad
I heard the metal chairs quarrelling in the porch
I smelled the traces of sulphur scorching the air
I felt the floorboards tremble and quake
I tasted the bile rising hot in my throat
I saw the endless explosions of whitest light
I knew it would only get worse
I heard the angry waters brutalize the shore
I smelled the musky zest of lateral rain
I felt the surge of vertigo as the cottage swayed on its piers
I tasted the bile rising hot in my throat
I saw the table bounce twice then leap off the deck
I knew the little girl scrambling under the bed
Published in the collection, Tuesday's Child: Poems from The Blue Heron (Piquant Press, December 2011) Copyright © 2011 Cheryl Andrews
7 comments
9 August 2012 at 8:16 pm
Heart To Harp
Very powerful and evocative! I heard the metal chairs quarreling! And felt the fear rising.
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9 August 2012 at 8:59 pm
Cheryl
Thank you, Janet! I’m so pleased it appealed to your senses.
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8 August 2012 at 2:51 pm
Gilly Gee
Excellent imagery conjuring up a very scary storm. I like the repeating line as well, great work!
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8 August 2012 at 3:10 pm
Cheryl
Thanks, Gilly. The repeating poetic form is known as ‘anaphora’. The repeating phrases relate to the senses.
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8 August 2012 at 4:27 pm
Gilly Gee
Aha I think I do that sometimes then – just didn’t know the name for it!
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8 August 2012 at 10:37 am
Mary E. McIntyre
Cheryl, this is powerful. Great imagery, rhythm and punch.
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8 August 2012 at 10:39 am
Cheryl
Thanks, Mary … I think you’ve ridden out at least one fierce storm at the lake with me!
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